{"id":31,"date":"2009-08-19T17:15:53","date_gmt":"2009-08-19T21:15:53","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/blog.sherryquanlee.com\/?p=31"},"modified":"2009-08-19T17:28:49","modified_gmt":"2009-08-19T21:28:49","slug":"blog-entry-2-re-visioning","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/blog.sherryquanlee.com\/?p=31","title":{"rendered":"RE-VISIONING: blog entry #2"},"content":{"rendered":"

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RE-VISIONING:\u00a0 blog entry #2<\/span><\/p>\n

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\nBy now, everyone who read my first blog entry has said, I\u2019ve heard it before <\/em>or s\/he has now written his\/her first poem!\u00a0 Nevertheless, to continue the discussion on how to make the poem better, let it be known, I enjoy revising.<\/p>\n

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However, a friend once said I have the habit of revising the life out of my writing.\u00a0 \u00a0Basically she <\/em>said she\u00a0would\u00a0rather see my passion ignite, my story explode, than crafty line breaks or intellectual word\u00a0c<\/em>hoices spark the page.\u00a0 Okay, both would be preferable, but I shouldn\u2019t lose the one for the other.<\/em><\/p>\n

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I try not to obsess as I revise. \u00a0Mantra:\u00a0 balance, moderation, know when to say no.<\/p>\n

However,<\/p>\n

some amount of tweaking is commendable.\u00a0 Tweaking should make the writing most engaging, most meaningful\u2014and it will look good, too!<\/p>\n

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Here\u2019s an interesting exercise which actually led to an unorthodox poem, or maybe a very orthodox one (who knows, once I was told my non\/linear essay was not good\u2014however I wasn\u2019t writing or trying to write a non\/linear essay-thus, my linear essay must have been truly meritless).<\/p>\n

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One of the love poems I\u2019ve written, and a possible highlight of my Imagine Love<\/em> manuscript, became an exercise in permanency versus my usual living and writing in the moment don\u2019t save everything I write, trash drafts\/no one is going to pay me or any living relative, if I happen to be dead, hundreds of thousands of dollars to have every scratch of my paper in their library <\/em>demeanor (however my sister is saving much of what I write).\u00a0<\/p>\n

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This love poem wanted to be visible in all its fluidity (the more I write or say the word love<\/em>, perhaps the better chance I will soon experience it).\u00a0 This poem said: don\u2019t eliminate parts of me you (me the author) don\u2019t like.\u00a0 This poem said: glorify my past, my present, and if you can figure a way to do it\u2014my future.\u00a0 Thus, nothing was discarded.<\/p>\n

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This is the poem:<\/p>\n

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Enough!<\/p>\n

she said, but how to mean<\/span> know enough<\/p>\n

enough to move<\/span> redirect intention; live loneliness<\/p>\n

majestically with\/out the bumps and bruises<\/p>\n

Hold on, hold out, hunger<\/span> hunker low, reject desire<\/span> the hunger.<\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 *<\/p>\n

\u00a0W<\/span>wait.\u00a0 Seize memory.\u00a0 Trust intuition<\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 he likes you okay you\u2019re beautiful<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 okay he\u2019s reaching for you okay<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 he\u2019s afraid okay he\u2019s being practical<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 okay this is what comfort can <\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 look like okay<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0<\/em>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 *<\/p>\n

\u00a0How to know time exists beyond identity, that<\/p>\n

love can wait and love can wait and love<\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 online dating<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 <\/em>even<\/span><\/em> <\/span>white women want white women<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0or whores<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0<\/em>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 white men want white women or<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 whores<\/span><\/em> Asian generally<\/span><\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 \u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 doesn\u2019t matter<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0<\/em>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 (never mattered who My Chinese daddy is)<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0<\/em>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 Mama is black<\/span> Negro and told me and told me<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 \u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 yes and no<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0<\/em>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0<\/em>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 <\/em>*<\/p>\n

How to recognize mistake from myth, assume guilt<\/p>\n

until proven innocence<\/em>, how many have loved and<\/p>\n

lost her<\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 you\u2019re white, she said, you\u2019re<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 a man, she said, Catholic, Republican, camper, kayaker, <\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0beautiful<\/span>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0narcissistic\u00a0 she said, <\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 <\/em>don\u2019t want you she said<\/em><\/p>\n

\u00a0<\/em>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 but, she said, Mr. Brown, quit messin\u2019 with me!<\/span><\/em>\u00a0\u00a0<\/span>\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0<\/p>\n

\u00a0She said, can I wait, I can wait, can I, why wait, who else has to wait, I\u2019m tired of wanting<\/p>\n

to wait<\/p>\n

\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 *<\/p>\n

\u00a0It\u2019s been awhile since I read this poem.\u00a0 I hear a cry for further re-visioning.\u00a0 And, maybe I should date each change to show the poem\u2019s journey over a long period of time.\u00a0 Ahhhhhhhhhh.\u00a0 Much to consider.\u00a0 (I see a page so dense in double strike-throughs, the poem disappears.\u00a0 Maybe I should become a visual artist.)<\/p>\n

\u00a0Try it.\u00a0 Write a poem today. Watch it evolve over days, months, maybe even years.\u00a0 But keep the poem in its entirety.\u00a0 Let it live!<\/p>\n

\u00a0<\/p>\n

Sherry Quan Lee<\/p>\n

August 19, 2009<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

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